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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages?

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The line graphs provide data regarding the
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 of people who went by
train
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 between 2000 and 2009 and the proportion of
trains
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 running on time in a 10-year
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 compared to the fixed target. Looking at the graphs, it is immediately obvious that there was an upward trend in the volume of
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 customers, and the similar was
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 true for the ratio of
trains
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 running on time over the given
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. From the upper graph we can see in the year
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2000, the number of customers who travelled by
train
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 stood at around 37
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. Over the
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 two years, there was a slight increase of 5
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 in the number of
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 passengers, and
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 the
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 of
train
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 customers decreased considerably by 5
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 in 2003.
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, the figure for residents travelling by
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 reached its peak in 2005, at around 47
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, and fell gradually to 42
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 in a 4-year
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 from 2005 to 2009. With regard to the lower graph, the ratio of
trains
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 running on time in 2000 peaked at 92%. Two years later, the figure for on-time
trains
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 achieved the fixed goal, with 95%. Over the
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 of six years between 2002 and 2008, there was a significant fluctuation in the proportion of on-time
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 it stayed the same from 2008 to 2009.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • autonomous vehicles
  • driverless technology
  • road safety
  • human error
  • traffic flow
  • congestion
  • real-time data
  • cost benefits
  • fuel consumption
  • vehicle maintenance
  • mobility
  • cyber-attacks
  • technical failures
  • infrastructure adaptations
  • ethical considerations
  • moral responsibility
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