Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

These days money is
significant
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factor for
develop
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the
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countries. Some
argues
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that the state budget should better be spent somewhere else rather than the
arts
.
This
essay totally
disagree
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with
this
opinion because the
arts
can reflect
history
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and culture of the nation ,and
also
the part of
lesuire
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leisure
time of citizens.
To begin
with, every nation has its own
history
and the
arts
is one of the important tools to reflect or show the culture or
history
to the world. Art is a huge umbrella
which
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also
includes music, films, performances.
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Government
Goverment
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The goverment
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should spend some money to preserve
this
.
For example
,
Joelouis
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Joe Louis
puppet which is one of the famous performance
arts
in Thailand has a lot of expenses per year in order to pay for the actors and run the theatre. If the
goverment
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government
do
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not support the fund,
this
troupe will be inclined to disappear.
Consequently
, the
next
generation of the society will no longer have the culture or
history
to be learnt.
In addition
, art could be part of activities that make individuals feel relaxed and joyful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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