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Some people believe that nowadays we have to many choices. To what extent do you agrre or disagree.

#people #choices #agrre
Having many choices is becoming increasingly important in today's society. According to some
people
, we can access the data through the advancement in
technology
 and innovations that
people
 did not have in the past.
This
 development provides us with many opportunities in different areas. I completely agree with
this
 statement due to the following essay. In terms of Science and
Technology
 have given
people
 an incredible alternative which is good for their lives. The influence of the internet coming from the improvement of
Technology
 has eliminated barriers in international trade and transportation. The wide choices of foreign
food
, products and other goods have made
people
 purchase conveniently.
Moreover
, The advancement of
Technology
 has provided
people
 to receive accurate information from the internet anytime they want.
People
 have an unimaginable number of resources online that they can access immediately and the is freedom enables us to make informed decisions in every step of our lives.
For instance
, they can decide what should be their
next
 holiday destination or which store offers the best price.
Technology
 and globalisation are beneficial for
people
 that they can choose in different fields
such
 as education,
food
, transport, treatment, entertainment. Take cultural
food
 dishes
for example
.
First
 of all, in the ,past most countries have mainly one or two national immigrants.
Therefore
, most available
food
 in restaurants is limited to mainly offering local dishes.
However
, nowadays, lots of
people
 are moving across the world, which offers immigrants can sell
food
 in their own traditional cuisine.
Consequently
,
this
 comes with a variety of restaurants offering different types of meals to choose from. One good illustration of
this
 is that the development of Science offers
people
 to have various methods of treatment so that
people
 can choose the best approach which is suitable for them. In conclusion, it seems to me that
people
 today are having numerous options to consider before making a decision which almost comes from the newest
technology
.
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