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You recently traveled on a train which arrived very late causing you to miss an appointment. Write a letter to the train company. In your letter, -explain what caused the delay in the journey -tell them what happened because of the delay -ask them for a refund

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Dear Sir, I am writing to you regarding yesterday’s train journey, which was awful in my view and evidence of the trip was
also
 attached with
this
 letter. About the poor service, my plan was to attend an employment interview in the afternoon,
although
 I failed to reach in time due to the derailment of the train at Lord Street.
Consequently
, I was extremely unhappy with the service. Due to not
following
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schedule
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, my interview
also
 suffered;
therefore
, I was not offered the opportunity as I was not considered punctual.
In addition
, my delayed lunch had cost me a significant amount of money;
therefore
, I would be suffering at the end of
month
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 with my limited budget. Request for money back, As the railway failed to provide me satisfying service according to the schedule, which hurt me financially and
lost
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 the chance to get a job;
thus
 I am asking for a money-back from Bangladesh Railway. I am awaiting your response. Yours faithfully, Ryan Smith
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