Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the ​growing traffic and pollution problems.

Nowadays, a many
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of societies are declining their
life
quality. In
this
essay, I will explain the reasons why it
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and suggest possible solutions to alleviate
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issues.
To begin
with, it is evident that individuals have sufficient productions in daily
life
.
For example
, citizens throw away items
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are not old or used when they bore to utilize them.
On the other hand
, when
people
consider and learn about recent environmental problems, they do not do that kind of
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.
In particular
, sea pollution is one of the issues in recent.
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is because
people
throw away plastic
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. If persons know about it, they must stop and reconsider their
behaviors
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.
Hence
,
large
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number of
people
absorb the knowledge about
latest
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informations
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which can show possible
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for civilians.
Moreover
, there is no doubt that technology development might lead
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problems.
This
means that
people
easy to use a lot of materials comfortably,
people
are not likely to do
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.
For instance
, in the factory, the machines are working
instead
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human
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. It can produce their
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cheaper and more improve their quantity.
In contrast
,
people
should less rely on
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technology. They originally developed their idea and invention.
In addition
,
human
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population will be increasing in the future. As for
this
, we ought to bring back the handmade method
such
as traditional items. As the result, they should take apart the developed
life
and make materials by hand. To sum up, it has two causes to have enough
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and invention.
However
, it
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possible to lead
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the
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low quality of
life
. They should avoid
this
matter to learn
our
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planet and be independent
from
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comfortable items.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discourage
  • incentivize
  • environmentally friendly
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • pollutants
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable economy
  • disproportionately affect
  • daily commuting
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • comprehensive solutions
  • public transportation systems
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