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It is generally agreed that the amount of rubbish created by humans today is a worldwide problem. What do you think are the main causes of this situation? What measures can be used to tackle the problem?

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Today's society has evolved into a remarkable
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 producing machine which is a global issue.
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 is primarily caused by 
ever-increasing
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consumption
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 of
goods
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 which can be addressed
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 encouraging sustainable consumer behaviour. Consumerism has reached an all-time high, accelerating
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 of
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. In today’s throw-away society,
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 are often bought today to go to the trash tomorrow to make room for the new, improved versions.
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 is because global mass production of
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 has made them accessible and affordable for many, devaluing them
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 just short-term use.
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 trend is a primary reason
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 accumulating often non-biodegradable
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 which worsens the situation with
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 created by humans. On average, today, an item of clothing is usually worn not more than 7 times before being thrown away, while it takes not less than 50 years to decompose. To reduce the impacts of
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 we consume, government initiatives to promote sustainable
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 can be introduced.
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, authorities should encourage consumer behaviour
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 is consistent with the environment by promoting the culture of reuse. For
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 purpose, small, mundane
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 choices that change people’s perception about shopping practices or purchasing decisions can be stimulated and rewarded.
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, some individual tax incentives can be introduced for those who buy clothes in
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 shops. In conclusion, a global issue of increasing rubbish production caused by
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 patterns influenced by consumerism can be addressed by encouraging sustainable
consumption
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.
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