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It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Is it possible to remove poverty and other
problems
 from the world, and help all humans who are living on the Earth? what are the government's duties for helping their
people
 or other
nations
'
people
?
To begin
 with, I suppose, it is difficult for a majority of governments to remove
problems
 and helping to their
people
. In
third
 world
countries
, there are numerous difficulties for their
people
, and their governments need other
countries's
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countries'
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 help, so developed and developing
countries
 must help them. For ,instance in some African's
countries
, they need pure water and food for their
people
.
In addition
, it is essential to work for other
nations
 to help them.
Secondly
, In my opinion, I disagree with the title and I think every human are human and need it together. So the progressive
countries
such
 as the United States of America and Europian's
countries
 must help the poor
countries
.
Furthermore
, an Unprecedented issue in our world is poverty and the United
Nations
 organisation have to focus on all
countries
 that need their help. Some
problems
 arise from the reduced value of its money.
For example
 in Iran, we have some
problems
 stem from a lack of management. To conclude
this
 essay, there are numerous states in a country and for a government is a duty to give them opportunities equally, so it is difficult to help other
nations
, but helping other humans is a duty for all of
people
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the people
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 who are living on the Earth,
therefore
, we can get together to help ourselves.
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