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It is impossible to help all people in the world, so governments should only focus on people in their own countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #world #governments #focus #countries
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Is it possible to remove poverty and other
problems
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 from the world, and help all humans who are living on the Earth? what are the government's duties for helping their
people
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 or other
nations
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'
people
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?
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 with, I suppose, it is difficult for a majority of governments to remove
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 and helping to their
people
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. In
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 world
countries
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, there are numerous difficulties for their
people
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, and their governments need other
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countries's
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 help, so developed and developing
countries
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 must help them. For ,instance in some African's
countries
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, they need pure water and food for their
people
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.
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, it is essential to work for other
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 to help them.
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, In my opinion, I disagree with the title and I think every human are human and need it together. So the progressive
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 as the United States of America and Europian's
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 must help the poor
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.
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, an Unprecedented issue in our world is poverty and the United
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 organisation have to focus on all
countries
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 that need their help. Some
problems
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 arise from the reduced value of its money.
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 in Iran, we have some
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 stem from a lack of management. To conclude
this
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 essay, there are numerous states in a country and for a government is a duty to give them opportunities equally, so it is difficult to help other
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, but helping other humans is a duty for all of
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people
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 who are living on the Earth,
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, we can get together to help ourselves.
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