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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It is true that some
people
 tend to believe that adapting to the current situation even it is bad is the best choice they have at the moment. While I agree that
people
 need to accept the reality in some situations and live the moment , I believe that reaching out to an elevated solution is better. On the one hand,
people
 get no choice other than to accept situations like financial crisis coming along with their family. To avoid getting into a dilemma,
people
 usually tend to choose the least risky option they have. In most circumstances,
for example
, elderly citizens relay their health and care with their medical bills on their caregivers. Kids are
also
 fully dependent on their caretakers for their education and protection which comes along with a huge financial need.
Therefore
, the person who puts the bread on the table is forced to stay on
the
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 unsatisfactory job or even with little wage gets
in to
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 the pocket.
On the other hand
, some
people
 are more enthusiastic to come out from
the
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 comfort zone for a better social status. Nowadays, a majority of
people
 try to make a stride out of many income sources while keeping one stable job as a prime financial status .
For instance
, working for a reputed company while owning a small business as a secondary income option.
As a result
 of climbing up the ladder of success having many financial options have
a
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tremendous help in long term to avoid suffering in an unsatisfactory job or resentments of getting paid a little wage. In conclusion, I fully support
for
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the view of hoisting life from unsatisfactory bad situations in a matter of time without stuck in the same unpleasant circumstances forever.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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