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The popularity of news media often had significant influences on people’s lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, the rapid development of
news
media
 has affected
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humankind’s lives and created a feeling of insecurity
for
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. And some
people
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consider
this
 is a phenomenon of negative growth. In my opinion, I partially agree with
this
 point of view.
Firstly
, the rising of social
media
 networking sites has brought several fake
news
. Nowadays, it is hard to know which information is true or fake. As anyone can spread any kind of information so easily without any consequences, there is no verification of what we hear or see.
As a result
, social platforms have become a paradise for the
people
 who want to take advantage of the trust of others to manipulate society.
Secondly
, it is
also
 easy to get addicted to certain
media
 channels
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, or some type of Television programs which have been suggested that significant negative influence on
people
's mental and physical health.
Besides
, once addicted,
people
 cannot focus on more critical tasks because their time has been taken by
news
media
 apps.
However
,
on the other hand
, I believe that the development of multimedia platforms has
also
 brought us several benefits. All types of
media
 connect
people
 from all around the world easily and quickly. It is possible to know about the
news
 of our loved ones in real-time, even from halfway across the globe.
In addition
, some
media
 platforms can help
people
 broaden and build their knowledge about everything they need that they may not get
otherwise
.
For example
, some political events and
news
 may not be broadcast on TV in certain countries, but Facebook and Google will allow citizens to know about them. In conclusion, I support the perspective that
news
media
 can significantly negatively influence
people
's lives, but I do not see it as a complete negative development. Social
media
 can become a helpful tool if we use it in the right way.
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