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The popularity of news media often had significant influences on people’s lives. Some people believe this to be a negative development. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, the rapid development of
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media
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 has affected
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humankind’s lives and created a feeling of insecurity
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. And some
people
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consider
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 is a phenomenon of negative growth. In my opinion, I partially agree with
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 point of view.
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, the rising of social
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 networking sites has brought several fake
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. Nowadays, it is hard to know which information is true or fake. As anyone can spread any kind of information so easily without any consequences, there is no verification of what we hear or see.
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, social platforms have become a paradise for the
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 who want to take advantage of the trust of others to manipulate society.
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, it is
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 easy to get addicted to certain
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 channels
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 as Facebook, Instagram, or some type of Television programs which have been suggested that significant negative influence on
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's mental and physical health.
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, once addicted,
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 cannot focus on more critical tasks because their time has been taken by
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media
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 apps.
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,
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, I believe that the development of multimedia platforms has
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 brought us several benefits. All types of
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 connect
people
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 from all around the world easily and quickly. It is possible to know about the
news
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 of our loved ones in real-time, even from halfway across the globe.
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, some
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 platforms can help
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 broaden and build their knowledge about everything they need that they may not get
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.
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, some political events and
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 may not be broadcast on TV in certain countries, but Facebook and Google will allow citizens to know about them. In conclusion, I support the perspective that
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media
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 can significantly negatively influence
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's lives, but I do not see it as a complete negative development. Social
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 can become a helpful tool if we use it in the right way.
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