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In many countries, people are living in a “throwaway society” where things are used for a short time and thrown away. What are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?

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In many countries,
people
 use their
things
 for a short
time
 and
dispose
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 them. In
this
 essay, I will explore the causes of
this
 trend and the problems it makes. One of the causes of the throwaway society is the convenience of modern industrialized society. These days,
people
 can easily buy daily
products
 at an affordable price, so there is no hesitation to throw them away.
In addition
, thanks to the development of delivery, they can buy
things
 online and get them soon.
Therefore
, it is reasonable for them to use
products
 for a short
time
 and buy new
products
,
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 because they can spare the
time
 to maintain
products
 to keep using them for
longer
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time
. The tendency of using
products
 for only a short
time
 brings the problem of unsustainability. Because
people
 dispose
things
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 shortly, the amount of garbage increases, and
as a result
, it destroys the ecosystem and environment.
For instance
, plastic bags cannot be digested by bacterias, so once
people
 throw
away
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them away
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 illegally,
it
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they
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 will be stored on the ground or in the ocean for a long
time
.
Moreover
, since animals cannot digest plastic, if they eat it too much, they will die. It means
such
 garbages destroy the ecosystem by killing animals and
environment
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the environment
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 by being stored for long period. To sum up,
people
 use
things
 for only a short period and
dispose
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 easily because they can buy
products
 at an affordable price and in a short
time
. One of the problems of
this
 trend is it affects the environment and the ecosystem.
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