You wanted to start your own business. Write a letter to a friend Tell him/her about your business Explain why you think it is a good idea Ask him/her help for some help or advice

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Dear Angela, How are you doing these days? I really hope you and your family are doing fine. I wanted to share some exciting news with you. I took your advice and started planning my

business

. As you are already aware of my interest in jewellery and accessories,

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I started creating a few handmade pieces which are absolutely gorgeous and are ideal

to sell

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online and

make

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profits.

Although

it does seem risky I spend all the resources in order to start a new

business

, it does provide great pleasure to be independent. Based on my research of the market, handmade objects are quite valued and provide great benefits.

Therefore

, I have decided to create more pieces and sell them online as it is a great platform to start small-scale businesses. I was hoping

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you could help me with the marketing aspect of the

business

. I am well aware of your schedules

due to

your own

business

but I

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be really glad if you could spare some time and endorse my products through your social media profile.

This

would give my products huge publicity and a great start to be in competition. We can discuss

this

in detail

this

weekend. Looking forward to seeing you

this

weekend! Warm wishes, Farhana Jabeen

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve clarity and coherence.

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Expand more on why you think your business idea is good to provide further justification.

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Clear and friendly opening and closing.

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Appropriate tone throughout the letter, engaging the reader effectively.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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