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Some people say that supermarkets should have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging for products they sell. Others say it is the responsibility of the consumers to avoid such products. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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Supermarkets play an important role in our life,
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. There are some
people
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 that think they should reduce the packaging of items in stock. Others
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 say it is the responsibility of the buyer to avoid them. In
this
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 essay, I am going to talk about both opinions and issues on how it could be improved.
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 hand we have grocery stores, where they sell a big amount of products to the public every day.
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 most of these items come in a package and
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 are protesting to reduce them especially because of the pollution.
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, the big chains of supermarkets could help and have a big impact on it, removing most of the plastic packs or replacing them with something more ecological. Though,
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 should be
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 concerned when they buy products of
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 kind. On the other ,head we have the customers,
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 the ones that buy more frequently. they should be more responsible, to avoid
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 products. If they chose to buy vegetables
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 of taking the one already in a pack they should go for the one sorted in the basket, so there is no need to
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 any sort of packaging.
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. There is a lot to work on to improve the
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 of it. In conclusion, Grocery stores are blamed for a big
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 of packs, so do
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. In my ,opinion they both should consider reducing their
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 to improve
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 problems with different strategies, together we can.
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