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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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 because of technology development. ,
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 cost much less than printed
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 because there is no
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 printing,fancy covers,packaging,cost,shipping, and others ...
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, which means they lost longer.and
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 contains all pages in digital format means the book is transformed into electronic form
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,one ebook reader can hold thousands of
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 to that, it saves a lot of space- in your home and in your bag.one doesn't have to worry about the storage limit.
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 are harder to read in sunlight. the glare of the sun makes a screen hard to read. in conclusion,
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 are very essential for every community it is costs very low than printed
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 while in the future world will miss
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