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3.In many countries, truancy is a worrying problem for both parents and educators. What are the causes of truancy, and what may be the effects on the child and the wider community?

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The bar graph provides data regarding the
quantity
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number
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 of citizens who paid a visit to various museums in London. Looking at the chart, it is immediately obvious that the most of residents in London spent their time visiting museums in August, especially with
British
Museum
.
In addition
, there were downward trends in the number of customers of
British
Museum
, History
Museum
 and
also
 National
Museum
 from August to October. From the bar
chart
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,chart
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 we can see that in June and July, the volume of inhabitants
came
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who came
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 to each
museum
 was almost the same. In August, over 700.000 people paid a visit to
British
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the British
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Museum
, followed by the level of customers of
History
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the History
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Museum
, at 600.000 people. Around 300.000 people came to National
Museum
, compared to 400.000 customers who visited Science
Museum
. After two months, in October, there was a steady decrease to under 200.000 in the number of
customer
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customers
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 who attended
National
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the National
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Museum
. Simultaneously, the figures for citizens who went to History
Museum
 and
British
Museum
 fell dramatically to 250.00 and 450.000 respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • truancy
  • peer pressure
  • bullying
  • engagement
  • curriculum
  • domestic violence
  • mental health issues
  • socioeconomic factors
  • poverty
  • academic underachievement
  • employment prospects
  • criminal activities
  • community safety
  • social cohesion
  • school funding
  • attendance rates
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