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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Others believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that it is necessary to have
friends
 who think
similarly
 and always agree on the same things, while others argue that it is unnecessary to find
friends
 like that. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
both
 of these viewpoints and give my
ideas
. On the
one
 hand, it is undeniable that people love to share their
ideas
 and moments with
friends
 who have the same interests and opinions.
That is
 because it makes them easier to get along together.
Moreover
, it will
stregthen
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strengthen
 their
ideas
 and make
it
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them
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 more powerful.
For example
, digital assets communities are
driving
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driven
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 by the group of millennials who believes in
new
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the new
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 financial system. When they stay together, they generate
a tons
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tons
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 of
ideas
 and solutions to solve the traditional financial issues.
This
 would not be
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a success
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success
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 if their
friends
 disagree.
Nevertheless
, there are some disadvantages
from
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to
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 listening to only
one
 side because we sometimes should listen to different opinions to improve our
ideas
.
On the other hand
, having
friends
 who sometimes have an
argrument
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argument
 with the opinion provides
both
 benefits and drawbacks. The positive side of
this
 view is that
one
 will
recieve
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receive
 the
geniune
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genuine
 feedbacks from their
friends
 before implementing. Any individual can make mistakes.
Therefore
, it would be better to gain
the
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a
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second
 opinion from others whom they can rely on.
Nonetheless
, not all of
others'
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the others'
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suggestion
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suggestions
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 are great, as sometimes
it
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they
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 may hurt the listener.
Hence
,
one
 should use his judgement. In conclusion,
both
 of these
type
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types
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 of
friends
 have advantages and disadvantages. It depends on the situation.
Hence
, we should have
both
 types of these people in the circle.
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