Some people believe that children can learn effectively by watching TV and they should be encouraged to watch TV both at school and at home. To what extent you agree or disagree?

It is true that some
television
programmes
have been recognised as an effective method of learning
,
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because the audio-visual information can attract students’ attention and engage their interest. While I understand the educational value of watching TV, I do not agree that increasing screen
time
is a good idea. There are three main reasons why I argue against that viewing more
television
programmes
can help
children
learn more effectively.
Firstly
, too much screen
time
can interfere with
children’s
study, and they may not be able to concentrate on school curriculums, a problem which can lead to poor grades.
Secondly
,
children
also
do not have spare
time
to participate in practical activities that enhance hands-on abilities,
such
as planting, painting and carving. These activities can promote brain development, which will
further
boost the effectiveness of learning.
Finally
, pupils may spend several hours
to sit
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in front of a
television
every day, and they are not willing to play games and do sports with peers;
as a result
, they may suffer obesity, bad eyesight or fatigue. Because of
this
, they do not have enough energy to cope with
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of schooling and lose self-confidence over
time
.
On the other hand
,
although
I acknowledge that some informative
television
programmes
may have positive influences on
children’s
study,
this
information can only be
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they have learned at school.The main advantage of
television
programmes
is that
children
are exposed to a world of knowledge.
However
,
sometime
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the knowledge is too complex for
children
to understand, and it cannot meet
children’s
demands at different age range.
For example
, a foreign language channel can help teenagers improve
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language abilities slightly, but it is too difficult for young kids who are without any foundation of foreign languages to understand it.
Therefore
, it is a waste of
time
for those young kids to watch it. I believe that students should spend most of their
time
on school courses, because those courses are more scientific and systematic, which can lead them to progress gradually and to learn effectively. To sum up, I would argue that extensive screen
time
will have an adverse impact on
children’s
academic performance and
children’s
health;
therefore
, parents and teachers should impose restrictions on
children’s
television
viewing, rather than endorse
this
habit.
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