Some people think that children should obey rules or do what their parents and teachers want them to do, but others think that children controlled too much cannot deal with problems well by themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Parenting and guiding
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for their better future are quite complex tasks and people have different opinions on parenting styles. Some opine that
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should always obey the
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imposed by the
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and should follow
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’ instructions.
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, another group of thought says that
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should be given some freedom and too much stringency from
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and
teachers
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could actually ruin their
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This
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both viewpoints and
finally
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express my own opinion. On one hand,
parents
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and
teachers
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usually set some
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for the
children
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and they expect the
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to follow these
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. In most
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the
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cases,
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and
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set
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that are helpful and beneficial for the
children
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.
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, I can recall that my mother always expected us to wash our hands before eating any food. Sometimes we felt quite bored
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instruction.
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, we now know that it was quite a good habit that our mother instilled in us.
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, there are many other
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that our
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wanted us to obey only because they were good
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and we, as
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, had little idea about the negative consequences of disobeying them. Another example is the
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when I wanted to watch cartoons on TV in the evening but my
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wanted me to go out and play some sorts of sports with other kids. At that
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it was quite an abhorrent activity for me but now I can realise how
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rule has actually helped me to have
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sound health.
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not all
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set by
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and
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are meant to dominate the
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but to actually help them grow properly.
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, it is quite hard to believe but actually true that many
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ruin their
children
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’s
life
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by being overprotective and being abusive. If a father beat a
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for silly reasons and a mother constantly follows and investigates what her teenage
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is doing, that will surely have a negative consequence.
Children
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who are always pressurised by
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and regulations
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their family members often end up being timid and hesitant. They lack many important characteristics in their adult
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and psychologists often attribute criminal activities due to abusing
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and
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in childhood.
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, if some
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of freedom are not given to the
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they often cannot expose their true potential in
life
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. Again, severe punishment from
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and
teachers
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can harm
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’s ingenuity and can turn them into
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immoral
person
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people
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. Considering both of the views I personally think that parenting is a complex task and it determines the future of a
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.
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parents
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and
teachers
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should not be too much rigid about
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and regulations as it would diminish
children
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’s creativity, respect and potential.
On the other hand
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, some beneficial
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should be there as
children
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often fail to understand the importance of discipline,
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of
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and hygiene. Wise
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and
teachers
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know the type of
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they should impose
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the
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and what they should be flexible about.
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and
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should be friendly to a
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in
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most of the
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and in some cases should be strict for the betterment of the
child
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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