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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience to support your arguments

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In the present
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students
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 have an option to go to other countries for higher studies,
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the
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 past they had to
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 in their native
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 for higher
education
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. Studying abroad have both merits and demerits.
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 discuss both
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perspectives.
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, for the
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 who go for studies from developing
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 to a developed
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 gets a quality
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 which he/she is unable to get in own
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.
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, a friend of mine who wanted to
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 Culinary Arts decided to go to Malaysia. He applied to the university there and got a nod on an application. He got the degree from there and had an opportunity to
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 a campus with
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 facilities. He
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get
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 the chance to learn from Michelin star chefs.
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Secondly
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 for a student living in a developing
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, a degree from a good university
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 a developed
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 opens doors for more job opportunities in and outside the
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. On contrary,
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the migration
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 of
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in
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the
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 foreign land
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 some pitfalls
also
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. One of the main
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 is Brain Drain. People who
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go
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 out to
foreign
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a foreign
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country
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 for higher
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 tends to settle there for brighter prospects and the nation will lose intelligent minds.
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, one of my friends who went to the US to
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 Neuroscience settled there as she got a better job with more benefits.
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 the nation missed out on a good doctor. To conclude studying abroad has both advantages and disadvantages. But in my opinion,
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 over-weighs
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their
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 disadvantages. Going abroad for higher studies will enable
students
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 to acquire quality
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 which in turn will give them
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a brighter
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 future.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Academic mobility
  • Cross-cultural
  • Language proficiency
  • Internationalization of education
  • Diaspora
  • Expat community
  • Pedagogic methodologies
  • Cultural literacy
  • Foreign academic credentials
  • Educational disparity
  • Repatriation
  • Xenophobia
  • Ethnocentric perspectives
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