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the alterations of the rural town between 1983 and present.

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The given maps illustrate the alterations of the rural metropolis between 1983 and the present. The general overview here is that the town undergoes a considerable transformation after the construction takes place.
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 the first map, it can be seen that in 1983 the city consisted of one main road running from the west to the east with connected to Munster
avenue
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Avenue
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 to the southwest, there was a farm situated on the east
side
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 of
this
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 road and a windmill located on the opposite
side
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,
while
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 the main avenue, to the west there were five houses on both
side
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 of the street, Next to these, situated to the north was a school,
whereas
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 there were a police station and post office located to the south near the river bank which was called river may running from the north to the south.
Moreover
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, the shop was located to the east and there was a huge forest situated on the northeast
side
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 of the city. At present, the old houses remain unaffected, but the green area to the northwest is all gone to make room for a new high road,
with surround
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surrounded
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 by a new house and connected to the main street. a dame is constructed on the north
side
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 of the river. The shop is replaced by an enormous supermarket.
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, where the farm stood there
is
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was
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 a petrol station and a cafe’ nearby.
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, the main facilities of the town remain unchanged.
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coherence cohesion
Improve clarity and precision in describing the locations and directions of the elements in the maps. Include more specific details and use clear transitions to improve coherence and cohesion.
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Provide a more thorough and comprehensive response to the task by including more specific details and analysis of the map changes. Ensure that the main points are well-supported with relevant examples and details.

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