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The main purpose of a university is to provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed for students to get a good job. To what extent do you agree?

From many years ago until now, universities play an important role in human’s life. These days, on account of improvement in
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 matter has become more crucial than before. Some people believe that the major responsibility of academic seats is helping
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 out to cultivate their skills and acquisitions which has a significant impact on finding jobs. I strongly support
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 point of view on the basis of cooperation academic centres with industry and government as well as working on edge of
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 which may change to a vital requirement in
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.
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 essay attempts to take a dive deep into the major reasons for the above-mention idea. One of the main reasons for the practicality of
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 a notion could be seen in collaboration between industry, government and university. Policy-makers as an enabler could help two other parts of
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 three-side joint-venture have a close relationship with each other. An example of being an enabler is exempting industrial sectors in lieu of cooperation with universities.
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 relation could cause universities to do some practical researches due to industrial-focused requirements. These researches, albeit having just a theoretical aspect in some cases, could help knowledge seekers to not only get acquainted with the industries but
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 know about the necessities of
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 field. If so,
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 may have an easier way to find their favourited job.
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 motive of the reasonability for the aforesaid idea is the state-of-the-art researches done in the academic centres.
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 is not to say that all educations are on the edge of the
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 one, but those cutting edge training have the possibility to change to the essential need for industries in
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 the very epitome of which is cloud computing which 20 years ago was only theoretical field;
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 it changed to a hands-on area in information
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 probation programs could either be thought to
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 or even done by them. Doing so,
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 help
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 out to become experts in the areas that industries will need in
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. in conclusion, while the role of guiding knowledge seekers to become skilful is one of the main duties of knowledge providers, I agreed with
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 argument. It is
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 predicted that
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 academic organization will play a more noticeable role in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stepping stone
  • preparatory grounds
  • theoretical knowledge
  • practical skills
  • industries
  • holistic development
  • intellectual growth
  • personal growth
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • research and innovation
  • advancing knowledge
  • societal benefits
  • employment prospects
  • professional networks
  • internships
  • alumni connections
  • collaborations
  • employability gaps
  • underemployment
  • changing nature of work
  • vocational training
  • online courses
  • self-learning platforms
  • targeted job-specific skills
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