Some young people are leaving countryside to live in cities or towns it leaves only old people in countryside. what are the problems of this issue? what can be done to solve this problem?

Nowadays, it is common for
youths
to migrate from the rural areas to the urban
centers
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centres
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in search of greener pastures
hence
reducing the population
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of
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yonger
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younger
generations in the
interland
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hinterland
.
This
essay will examine the causes of
this
predicament and state what can be done to mitigate it. It is no news that the big cities provide
oppurtunities
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opportunities
that are not available in the villages.
For instance
, In the cities,
oppurtunities
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opportunities
for
employements
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employment
employments
are numerous
as
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compared
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compered
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compared
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to the countryside. It is easier for young individuals to be gainfully
empoyed
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employed
and earn wages that will allow
him
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them
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to live the lifestyle they have always dreamt of.
For example
,
i
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I
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left my home town
few
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a few
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years ago for the city just for me to secure a job that fits my qualification. I would have remained unemployed and not been able to support my family had
i
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remained in the smaller town.
Also
,
urban rural
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urban-rural
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migration will continue to rise as long as the countryside
are
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is
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bereft of basic
infracstructures
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infrastructures
infrastructure
like good roads, hospitals and access to clean water to support
life
. The unavailability of these amenities will make the villages
unattarctive
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unattractive
attractive
for
youths
who are
forward thinking
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. These issues stated above can be fixed and gradually reduce
migration
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the migration
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of young
individualls
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individuals
. There are some measures that will be put in place that will speed up the reversal. Some of these measures include
:
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Government
ecouraging
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encouraging
individuals by the way of reducing
tax
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taxes
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and mandating them to set up factories in the rural areas.
This
will
inturn
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in turn
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ensure that jobs are available for the
youths
there and as
such
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they can provide for them and their
dependants
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dependents
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.
Forethermore
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Furthermore
, the amenities in these areas should be upgraded so that people that are staying behind could live a comfortable
life
and their
life
expectancy will increase. when the
youths
realise that better
life
is available for
the
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them, they will not be motivated
seek
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oppurtunities
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opportunities
outside. To sum up, the migration to urban
centers
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centres
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will continue if there
are
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is
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no
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not
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much source
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of
livelyhood
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livelihood
in the villages.
However
,
government
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the government
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can reverse these
trend
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trends
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by providing jobs and
improve
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social
ammenities
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amenities
in the smaller towns to attract the young ones to stay behind.
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