Some young people are leaving countryside to live in cities or towns it leaves only old people in countryside. what are the problems of this issue? what can be done to solve this problem?

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Nowadays, it is common for

youths

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to migrate from the rural areas to the urban

centers

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centres

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in search of greener pastures

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reducing the population

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yonger

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younger

generations in the

interland

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hinterland

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essay will examine the causes of

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predicament and state what can be done to mitigate it. It is no news that the big cities provide

oppurtunities

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opportunities

that are not available in the villages.

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, In the cities,

oppurtunities

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opportunities

for

employements

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employment

employments

are numerous

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apply

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compared

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compered

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compared

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to the countryside. It is easier for young individuals to be gainfully

empoyed

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employed

and earn wages that will allow

him

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them

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to live the lifestyle they have always dreamt of.

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left my home town

few

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years ago for the city just for me to secure a job that fits my qualification. I would have remained unemployed and not been able to support my family had

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remained in the smaller town.

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urban rural

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migration will continue to rise as long as the countryside

are

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bereft of basic

infracstructures

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infrastructures

infrastructure

like good roads, hospitals and access to clean water to support

life

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. The unavailability of these amenities will make the villages

unattarctive

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unattractive

attractive

for

youths

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who are

forward thinking

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. These issues stated above can be fixed and gradually reduce

migration

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the migration

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of young

individualls

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individuals

. There are some measures that will be put in place that will speed up the reversal. Some of these measures include

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Government

ecouraging

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encouraging

individuals by the way of reducing

tax

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taxes

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and mandating them to set up factories in the rural areas.

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will

inturn

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in turn

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ensure that jobs are available for the

youths

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there and as

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such

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they can provide for them and their

dependants

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dependents

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Forethermore

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Furthermore

, the amenities in these areas should be upgraded so that people that are staying behind could live a comfortable

life

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and their

life

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expectancy will increase. when the

youths

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realise that better

life

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is available for

the

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them, they will not be motivated

seek

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oppurtunities

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opportunities

outside. To sum up, the migration to urban

centers

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centres

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will continue if there

are

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not

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much source

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many sources

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livelyhood

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livelihood

in the villages.

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government

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the government

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can reverse these

trend

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trends

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by providing jobs and

improve

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improving

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social

ammenities

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amenities

in the smaller towns to attract the young ones to stay behind.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some young people are leaving countryside to live in cities or towns it leaves only old people in countryside. what are the problems of this issue? what can be done to solve this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

In the developed world, the average life expentancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

Nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages.

Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encourage to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified worked such as electrians and plumbers. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.