Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

This

days many

products

are high-calorie due to a large amount of sugar. A substantial number of detrimental diseases

such

as obesity and diabetes are attributed to the consumption of sugar .many

people

claim that to control

this

devastating effect, the government should impose higher prices on sugary foods and drink. Despite the fact that

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approach can be effective somehow, I believe the more efficient method should be taken to control the devastating effect of high-sugar food. Putting more price on foods that contain sugar has several merits;

first

of all, it would act as a deterrent on purchasing

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products

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For example

,

people

in the middle-social class, because of their limitation in the budget are more affected by

this

policy. In other world,

People

to manage their expenses would buy less harmful

products

like soft drinks because these are dispensable for the main diet.

Furthermore

,

people

can control their craving for sweet ingredients.

On the other hand

, despite imposing higher prices for sugary food and drink, the rate of selling

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snacks is still at a conspicuous level. One of the overriding reasons for

this

is,

people

awareness about a healthy lifestyle is alarmingly low,

thus

people

will proceed with their previous regime without considering the inflation on

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is the main reason for experiencing the debilitating disease namely obesity, eye disease and diabetes. It is imperative for the government rather than just making

this

sort of food expensive, to focus on raising awareness of

people

about alternative healthy diets, boosting the general health of

people

and decreasing the chance of catching illnesses. To conclude,

in contrast

to attitude claiming the government and manufacturer, should exert more value on sugary foods, which can deter

people

from purchasing these, I firmly opine that

this

way is not the only means,

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there are more practical and liable measures like inform society about alternative healthy lifestyle, driving to a more positive result.