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Many people believe that learning a foreign language is a very difficult task. What are the most difficult things about learning a foreign language? What are the best ways to overcome them? Explain ands include your personal experience or knowledge of these problems.

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Learning a new
language
 or being good at it has always been a tough task for many individuals. In my opinion, lack of guidance and self-practice could be the reason.
However
, communication with native speakers and
language
-specific TV shows and movies helps to become an excellent user. It is an undeniable fact that proper guidance is an essential part of any task to master. When
people
 start to learn a new
language
, they often make the mistake of choosing a better school or teacher. Ultimately, they fail to become a good user.
Additionally
, self-practice
along with
 a suitable guide is equally important. It has been seen that
people
 spend enough time in
language
 school,
however
, lack of practice will not allow them to be perfect in a foreign
language
 and they give up after a few tries. One of the best ways to become an expert in a foreign
language
 is an interact with native speakers.It is a fact that when
people
 move to another country they often learn their
language
 in a short period of time.
In other words
, a person who moved to Spain with a bare minimum knowledge of Spanish is most likely to learn Spanish faster than other
people
 living in his country.
Also
, watching movies and TV shows plays a vital role in a learner's life as actors in TV and movies use common words and slang which can help to improve vocabulary.
Thus
, the user will learn fast.
To sum up
, Indeed, learning a new
language
 has never been an easy job for many, especially when one's teacher is not right and the person himself does not have enough time to practice.
However
, communicating with locals and films could be an asset in learning of foreign
language
.
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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your essay into more distinct paragraphs for each main idea or argument. This will help the reader navigate through your points more easily.
task achievement
While you have addressed the topic reasonably well, add more specific examples or personal experiences to make your points stronger and more relatable.
task achievement
Work on refining some of your sentences for clarity and conciseness. For example, 'and they give up after a few tries' can be more effectively presented as 'leading them to give up after a few attempts.'
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that frame your arguments well.
coherence cohesion
You have presented logical reasons for why learning a foreign language can be difficult and have provided possible solutions.
task achievement
The essay topic has been addressed adequately and provides relevant information and arguments.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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