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nrup shah

Nov 10, 2021

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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interpersonal relationships
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long-distance relationships
superficial connections
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communication technology
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cultural exchange
emotional depth
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digital communication
virtual interactions
miscommunication
social isolation
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