Nowadays many people interact with each other and have changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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that technology is
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away from each other and
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people
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, Modern technology is very
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or
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very easily. Durning covid pandemic labour
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stoped and many
people
are unemployed but other educated
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application.
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teenagers and it is very harmful to
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career but some of the online
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connected or improve
people
relations.
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