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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs provide information on the daily consumption of the three types of nutrients sodium, saturated fats, and added
sugar
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 that an average person in the United States takes in each meal and in
snacks
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.
Overall
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, daily intake of all said nutrients but added
sugar
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 is most during dinner followed closely by lunch. Almost half of the daily
sugar
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 intake comes from
snacks
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. These nutrients can be harmful in the long run.
Chart
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The chart
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 illustrating the consumption of sodium shows that dinner contributes the maximum intake at 43% followed by lunch at 29%, and equal halves at breakfast and
snacks
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 at 14%. The saturated fat chart follows a similar pattern with dinner leading at 37% and lunch at 26% ,
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however
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snacks
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 consist of more fat consumption than breakfast at a difference of 5% between the two. In regards to saturated
sugar
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intak
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intake

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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