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World travel was revolutionized in the 20th Century to the extent that the world has now become a global village. What factors will influence travel this century? Will travel continue to grow or will it become less popular?

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Introduction
Travelling around the world has become more popular in the current decade obviously than before, and it tends to become like a big city. There have significant factors which are dominating the facts that most people are aware of that as well.
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, marvellous growth of engineering sectors on infrastructures is one of the points which affect to all these sectors, a tremendous number of companies have been investing on the production of an aeroplane, bullet train and even though luxury cruise ship as well.
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, people from Japan can easily make ten days of vacation trips by plane on their holiday.
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, the government strategy on travel and tourism functions is crucial as well as a kind of supports for the local GDP. Meanwhile by investing in the entertainment buildings and creating tourist attraction places, amusement parks, man-made islands and retaining the cultural traditions have been highlighting the tourist attractions and creating carrier opportunities as well. The best example is the Kingdom of Thailand. That country is one of the most attractive countries for travellers with unbelievable creative infrastructures.
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 the visa application process has been complicated in order to travel to some of the countries like the U.S.A, France and UK, there has still an outbound travel package to these locations every year.
Conclusion
To be concluded, based on the facts, whether outbound trips to different countries have been dreams of adults and it may never disappear as always.

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