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To be truly positive in the eyes of some, you have to risk appearing negative in the eyes of others. In about 350 words, state whether or not you agree with this statement.

#eyes #risk
The universe has been decorated with multidimensional people since inception.
However
, everyone is possessing a unique character. Even though, to remain in good books of someone, one has to sacrifice another.Surprisingly,I am hundred percent agree with the statement.
Thus
,in
this
 way I will try to enforce my agreement with authentic examples.
Firstly
, If we talk about professional world, we have seen many people gossiping against their bosses about the mistreatment on workplace.
Although
, healthy discussions occur, but mostly
such
 conversation leads towards wrong directions.
however
,there is a famous saying that 'A good Manager must produce 10 best managers '.
For example
: If a line manger guides you properly for your wrong action that means ,he/she tries to make you learn from mistakes by not repeating the same in future.In
such
 case a serious professional doesn't care about who says what at his/her back.they just care about producing refined employees.
Likewise
, we have seen
such
 cases within siblings. Sometimes, they develop grudges between each other for the sake of competencies ,mannerism and beauty.
Although
 parents must communicate their kids about exclusive qualities individually.
For example
: Guardians are habitual of saying ,specially in my case when I was young, that look at your elder sister , she is so intelligent, so smart, so friendly and mature.
Also
 the way she is excelling in her future , I always used to hate them , I used to think that I am an adopted child.but now after 15 years later down the Lane I realised they were right.if I would not had put my ear on their instruction , I would have doing nothing today. In
this
 way , we all sometimes indulge into
such
 situations , where we have to safeguard others on behalf of our wishes . But to gain respect in someone's eyes one has to compromised on less valued things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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