Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that

children

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should be taught how to be a good

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by their

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, while others reckon that

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should be responsible for

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task. From my point of view, I think that both

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and

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need to have responsibility for teaching

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to become nice members of society. On the one hand, there are

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of reasons why

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should learn how to be a good

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from their mother and father.

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of all,

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regularly spend most of

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in their life with

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they can learn and follow their

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' behaviours and thoughts since they were

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small

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, if the mom often encourages her son to read books or help others, her kid might become a kind person who usually makes a

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to the community.

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can see their

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every day,

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, they are able to remind

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give their son and daughter some

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advice

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when they do something wrong.

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, if

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lie, their

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could talk to them and advise them not to do it again.

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, the

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and university should

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have responsibilities for teaching students how to be nice in society.

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with,

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best place that people can study everything including being good members

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the community.

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, students would find it easier to learn.

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children

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tend to obey their teachers more than their

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, so they might follow what their teachers

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, they can learn from their friends. To sum up,

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should teach their

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to become

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kind person because they are people who spend most of

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with

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and take care

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however

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children

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also

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spend quite a lot of time at

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so teachers

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responsibilities to teach.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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308 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

good members of society
teach
parents
schools
responsibility
values
respect
empathy
responsibility
formal education
citizenship
ethics
social responsibility
lead by example
role models
conducive environment
extracurricular activities
community involvement
collaborate
holistic approach

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