Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is undeniable that
children
should be taught how to be a good
citizen
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citizens
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by their
parents
, while others reckon that
school
should be responsible for
this
task. From my point of view, I think that both
parents
and
school
need to have responsibility for teaching
kids
to become nice members of society. On the one hand, there are
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of reasons why
kids
should learn how to be a good
person
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people
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from their mother and father.
First
of all,
children
regularly spend most of
time
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in their life with
parents
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their parents
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,
thus
they can learn and follow their
parents
' behaviours and thoughts since they were
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small
child
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children
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.
For example
, if the mom often encourages her son to read books or help others, her kid might become a kind person who usually makes a
contribute
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to the community.
In addition
,
parents
can see their
children
every day,
as a result
, they are able to remind
also
give their son and daughter some
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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when they do something wrong.
For instance
, if
children
lie, their
parents
could talk to them and advise them not to do it again.
On the other hand
, the
school
and university should
also
have responsibilities for teaching students how to be nice in society.
To begin
with,
school
is
a
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best place that people can study everything including being good members
to
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the community.
Therefore
, students would find it easier to learn.
Besides
,
children
tend to obey their teachers more than their
parents
, so they might follow what their teachers
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.
Also
, they can learn from their friends. To sum up,
parents
should teach their
kids
to become
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kind person because they are people who spend most of
time
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their time
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with
kids
and take care
them
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of them
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,
however
,
children
also
spend quite a lot of time at
school
so teachers
also
has
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responsibilities to teach.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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