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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
In today’s world
human
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 confront environmental issues which
cause
negative
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 impact on our life. Despite the fact that there
are
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variety
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a variety
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 of nature difficulty, some people believe that loss
the
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fauna
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of fauna
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 and flora are more important than
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. Generally
speaking
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 there are several environmental issues as well as each one plays important role in our society.
Ruin
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 of especial plants can
cause
 climate change in the future.
First
 off, because all of the planets are
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 to each other by interfering
to
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this
 cycle nature face
to
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critical issues.
For example
, by fading a nature Carbon dioxide cannot be absorbed;
moreover
, it spears to the atmosphere and
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Oxygen could not release appropriately.
Additionally
, because of
survival
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 chain in our
community
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 it would be harmful
for
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 both animals and
humanity
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,
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 if they faced
to
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endangered.
For instance
, if birds extinct, the other animals do not have
a food
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food
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 for
consuming
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.
On the other hand
, pollution is one of the critical
threat
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threats
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for
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 natural resources. By increasing in number car usage, most of the
vehicle
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 produce mono dioxide; meanwhile, it has
influence
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 on Ozone layer which plays
first
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 role in global warming.
Similarly
, by overpopulation the governments have to sprawl urban; what’s more, the lands are destroyed by humankind to provide situations for their life. As an example, in the capital of our country, because of born
rating
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 the government build skyscraper for families and it
cause
to
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 encroach the animal territories. To sum up, both sides have
a
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special problems for our environmental life which
cause
 important damage for our children.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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