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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems.

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Dwelling in a foreign
country
 with a different
language
 contributes to both social and practical
problems
.
This
 essay agrees that not being
expert
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 in a foreign
country
 can lead to some communication issues which can end up
to
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 some practical difficulties.
This
 essay will discuss how living in a foreign
country
 where the
language
 is different
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associates
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to
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 social and practical
problems
.
Language
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to
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 human interaction,
therefore
 not being native can cause some
problems
. Slang and
also
, professional expressions are the main cause of some communication issues. By way of illustration conversation with colleagues and friends need good knowledge of
slangs
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.
In addition
, perceiving law or getting data from
lawyer
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lawyers
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 demand
variety
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 of
vocabularies
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. In
these
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both
cases
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 foreign people should deal with social and practical
problems
. Another reason is the
prospective
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 of foreign person. Native
language
 has a significant impression of the way of thinking.
Therefore
,
foreign
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a foreign
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 person with
different
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language
 cannot convey his/her thoughts to others in that society properly.
For instance
, a foreign person would use a translated sentence from his/her native
language
 which is incomprehensible for others. Sometimes making sentences in
foreign
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language
 is
effected
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affected
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 by the native
language
 which makes them intangible. To conclude, living in another
country
 would cause some difficulties, particularly the current
language
 is different from the immigrant native
language
.
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, not being fluent
in addition
 to thinking in the native
language
 is partly responsible for communication and practical
problems
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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