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Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that air pollution is a major environmental concern nowadays. Owing to the possible harmful effect on the atmosphere. While some people believe that wolrd car-free
days
 are an efficient way in minimizing greenhouse gas emission, others argue that there are different possible ways to consider. I believe that car-pooling and public transportation are far better choices.
First
 and foremost, international car-free
days
 are
days
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 encourage motorists to give up their cars for certain weekdays during the year.
Instead
, they may use bikes or other transportation facilities. In short, it may seem a good way in reducing carbon dioxide emissions,
However
, it is not a long term plan as it doesn't provide continuity.
Moreover
, those
days
 were subjected to the personal feeling of responsibility.
In other words
, it is not necessary for all citizens to follow.
On the other hand
, if we consider other plans like using public transportations, we will experience
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outcome
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. In order to reduce the number of cars on the road, governments must adopt improving transportation facilities like the underground subways and buses that are powered by electricity.
Consequently
, if the previous plans are considered, traffic congestion will decline. What's more, now people are showing more acceptance toward the car-sharing concept. To illustrate, a new mobile phone application emerged from the previous ideas,
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 anyone can enter their details including their personal identification, where they are going to start the ride and where it will end.
Then
, anyone who matched the same route can share the car together. To sum up,
although
 dedicating some
days
 to stop car use may sound a good idea,I think more organized and governmentally adopted plans are showing promising results in reducing atmospheric pollutants.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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