In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
As obesity has been
an
wide problem mainly Change the article
a
to
the most developed countries, some governments are considering Change preposition
in
to improve
the Change the verb form
improving
taxes
applied on junk food
, in order
to make people
avoid its consumation
. Personally, I strongly disagree with that statement, since Correct your spelling
consumption
consummation
this
is not going to be a solution for this
matter.
At first
, it is important to considerate
that individuals must be able to choose whatever they want to consume, even if their choice is not the best for their health. Living Replace the word
consider
on
a Change preposition
in
democrate
place means, Correct your spelling
democratic
Correct your spelling
overall
over all
, giving Correct your spelling
overall
people
equal rights to do anything they want, as much as it does not interfer
Correct your spelling
interfere
in
other's Change preposition
with
people
choices. This
Government suggestion would correspond as stopping selling meats in the boucheries, in order
to impose people
to turn vegetarians and, consequently
, help the reducion
of Correct your spelling
reduction
methano
in the air and, as well, decrease pollutions rate to the world, in a global Correct your spelling
methane
methanol
perspection
, while in another hand would contribute to Correct your spelling
perspective
people
's health as an individual instance, which is a completly
insane idea.
Correct your spelling
completely
Furthermore
, whereas for some perspective
processed Fix the agreement mistake
perspectives
food
might be a non satisfactory
choice for some individuals, it would mean to be the only resource for others. It is explained because junk Add a hyphen
non-satisfactory
food
as mac and cheese, for example
, usually is way cheaper than buying proteins, as
rice and beans, from the Replace the word
like
market place
. Correct your spelling
marketplace
Through
Change preposition
From
this
point of view, increasing taxes
at
those unhealthy items would only become a bigger problem for Change preposition
on
society
, since probably there would be more starving people
at
Change preposition
on
streets
, without anything to eat in Correct article usage
the streets
order
to survive, which also
could increase homeless and violence rates.
So on, indeed, it still would not be a solution for the obesity problem. It must be considerated
that the rush on somebody's routine, summed at the way those GMO Correct your spelling
considered
food
save people
's time, mainly on business week days
and its delightful flavour, will do contribute to Correct your spelling
weekdays
this
kind of majoraty
consumption. Correct your spelling
majority
Therefore
, instead
of taking off the possibility of acquiring these kind
of products, it would be more Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
effectively
, as a Government Policy, to buzz up lectures and advertising, in Replace the word
effective
order
to teach people
how to get organyzed
and Correct your spelling
organized
concious
about what they digest and how high calories in those foods could be resulting, in the near future, in hearth diseases and be a bad choice for their health, as sides effects of its consumption.
In summary, as already exposed above, increasing Correct your spelling
conscious
taxes
will definitely not contribute to make
Change the verb form
making
people
avoid junk food
, as it will not be a resourceful way of reducing obesity taxes
in society
. This
idea would only bring more issues to the society
and its Government, but would also
not be solving the real society
's obese situation.Submitted by croonf on
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