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With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more genetically modifies food. what are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

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World's
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 inhabitants are growing relentlessly ,
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 some experts
suggeste
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suggest
suggested
 producing more genetically modified
corpsin
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crops in
corps in
 order to
to
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meet the increasing demands on
food
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.
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, despite the
benifits
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benefits
 of
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 a plan ,it has many downsides to be taken into consideration.
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one
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 hand ,
food
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 genetic engineering as a scientific branch
,
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started ten years back only and a lot of trials
still
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 needed to confirm its safety on humans and
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environment
environmemnt
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. For that reason many
scientist
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still
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 reluctant to approve it for use on a large scale . Some reports,
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, indicated the possibility of
a cancerous effects
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cancerous effects
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 of genetically modified wheat , and that it should not be consumed by children.
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, the opponent of
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 kind of
food
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 produce consider more practical solutions , at least from their point of view, for
food
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 security achievement,
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 as desert reclamation, and swamp
drainig
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draining
drainage
 , so advanced technology and laboratories, as they claim, have to stay away from people's dining room .
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 , the rising
number of
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population
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the population
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 particularly in developing countries and
shrinking
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the shrinking
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 of agricultural lands , added to climate
changing
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 and the
unpredented
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unprecedented
 drought affecting large areas of green lands, would
enevitably
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inevitably
 threaten
food
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 security in many less
devrloped
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developed
 countries . For
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 reason , genetic engineering seems an attractive and relatively safe and fast rescue plan to save millions of
hungery
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hungry
 people . In conclusion, people have to eat , they are increasing in numbers without a proportional rise in
food
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 production, and using technology for
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 purpose might be justified.
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