Many people think cheaper air travel should be encouraged because it gives ordinary people to travel further. However, others think this leads to environmental problems, so air travel should be more expansive in order to discourage people to have it. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Some
people
believe that air
travel
price
should be lower that more and more Fix the agreement mistake
prices
people
have a chance to travel
abroad. But others think it can have negative impacts on environment
, so Add an article
the environment
air
travel
prices should be higer
. In my opinion,Correct your spelling
higher
i
think Change the capitalization
I
air
travel
should be more expensive,
so that Remove the comma
apply
people
can have more motivate
to Replace the word
motivation
work
to travel
.
On the one hand , majority of people
encourage the air
travel
price
should be lower ,
so that more and more Remove the comma
apply
people
have the chance to travel
a lot
,
and broaden their horizons. When the Remove the comma
apply
air
travel
price
cheaper
than before, there Add a missing verb
is cheaper
are
Change the verb form
is
increasing
number of Change the article
an increasing
the increasing
people
can
Correct pronoun usage
who can
travel
a lot
, people
can see many things that they never seen
before as Add the auxiliary verb
saw
have never seen
travel
is the best way that people
can learn a lot
from their travel
experience. For example
, most primary school
usually Fix the agreement mistake
schools
orgnaise
some school Correct your spelling
organise
trip
to take their student to Fix the agreement mistake
trips
travel
to
overseas, Change preposition
apply
that
can make students learn more things, which they are didn't learn in school. Correct pronoun usage
which
In addition
, if air
travel
can be cheaper can make people
become more productive. people
who are working in comanies
or factories often feel exhausted because of their heavy workload, so if Correct your spelling
companies
air
travel
can be cheaper, those kinds of people
can travel
a lot
to relieve their stress, and during travelling, they would feel relaxed , therefore
, after travel
, they would become more productive,and make their comany
become more profits.
Correct your spelling
company
On the other hand
, air
travel
become
cheaper can have many negative Change the verb form
becomes
impact
, due to the Change to a plural noun
impacts
air
travel
price
lower than before, there will be more and more people
enjoy travelling, that may cause many environmental problems,such
as air
pollution, so that the air
travel
price
should be more expensive, and that can make peole
Correct your spelling
people
work
hard, have motivation in order to travel
. For instance
, last
year, the University of Singapore did a survey and 80%of people
think that the more expensive travel
price
made peole
have more Correct your spelling
people
motivate
to go to Change the form of the verb
motivated
work
,making money , therefore
they not only can work
harder to travel
abroad,but also
that can made
that company increase their profits , leading a rise in employment rates, and most importantly, when the Change the verb form
make
be made
travel
price
become higer
, the environment condition would become better, due to there are not that many Correct your spelling
higher
people
travel
, that can lead to a decline in air
pollution level. Make our planet become more health
, make us have Replace the word
healthy
better
life.
In conclusion, Add an article
a better
although
the travel
price
cheaper
Add a missing verb
is cheaper
people
can travel
a lot
and can broaden people
's horizons, that
can cause severe Correct pronoun usage
which
air
pollution,
and leads to Remove the comma
apply
severe
environmental Add an article
a severe
the severe
problem
. When the Fix the agreement mistake
problems
air
travel
price
become
more expensive ,Change the verb form
becomes
people
will travel
less time, and work
harder have more motivation in order to travel
abroad, that can not only increase the company's profit,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
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