The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why?

In the contemporary era
education
is
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powerful source of information for
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lifestyle as it teaches everything for happy modern life. The sources of
education
such
as the Internet and older family members are
alternative
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to school teaching.
Nonetheless
, most people are of the opinion that the knowledge from family is more valuable in comparison to that of from
education
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. To some
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I disagree with
this
point of view and in
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I will explain my opinion with supporting examples. In the
first
-place
education
from
schools
is very much informative and deep. To be more precise, the concepts delivered from teachers are in order and explanatory, as they know how to teach and what to teach their students.
For example
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first year
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scholar
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scholars
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will be taught basic math
level
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levels
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, not
high
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one
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. A serious structure in
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system is well proven by years.
In addition
,
schools
have not only 5 subjects to learn, but
also
a lot of units related to the outside world and how to practice that knowledge with a lot of range of activities by getting certified.
Therefore
, of
this
exposure, youngsters will get to know what to do
in particular
circumstances.
For instance
, due to my school
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a champion of table tennis amongst the country as
physical
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education
trainer, I have learned how to play it on the professional level, and
this
skill helped me in my work area, where management got to know me by evening table tennis games. On the other side of the argument,
education
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very strict, where discipline and experience above all. If members of the family have some skills, which are not found anywhere,
then
this
helps
to
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children to get excelled. A good illustration of
this
can be
a
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poetry, art and agriculture, where transferring skills and secret family knowledge from elders to minors are essential.
However
,
this
does not
fulfill
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young’s need to not lag in the modern world, where science and information technologies are key players everywhere. To sum up, even though some might argue with me saying they can teach values, traditions from family
education
, I would disagree believing it is totally inaccurate to
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only one source of information. Modern
schools
provide well-structured different concepts by using new technologies and great
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. I think that a mix of teaching from family and school is the best to balance current problems, but the
schools
anyway overweigh family teaching as they provide a wide range of academic exposure.
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