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SOME PEOPLE PREFER RURAL LİFE AND THE OTHERS PREFER LIVING IN THE CITIES.WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THEIR PREFERENCES.WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES ABOUT THIS SITUATION

#people #li̇fe #cities #preferences #situation
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It is not weird presently to see somewhere in the restaurant that each person of family watching on the screen with their own
smart phones
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. It is argued whether it will lead to
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 of family relationships and communication.
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 I agree that each member of the family must have their own modern technology, I think that high usage of it
also
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bring
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many
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 harmfulness.
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one
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 hand, the involvement of technology
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nowadays
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nowaday
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nowadays
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 in daily life is indispensable. Because It makes our life much
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easier,
such
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 as
smart phone
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. It is impossible to share your phone with someone else , even your closest person because you need it for your work, for your
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leisure
, for your payment.
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, each member of the family
have
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 their own
smart phone
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smartphone
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 is
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necessary
.
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 the other hand, the
tegnology
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technology
 company spend a lot of money to make you
addict
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 to their gadgets. Sometimes I always wonder how many words in the day people will communicate to each other after the invention of
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iPhone
iphone
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. Some
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research
showing
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 the negative effects of
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apply
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iphone
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iPhone
 usage as people tend to spend more time on it avoiding their own relationship in the real world.
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baby forgot how to communicate with his parent. In conclusion, though I think that if each member of
family
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have
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 their own technology will break down the relationship and communication, I think there should be
limitation
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a limitation
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 and control the usage of it.
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