IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

In many countries, students take a year off finishing school should students take a gap year before attending university? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

#countries #students #year #school #gap #university #trend
In many nations of the world, there are many choices confronting teenagers after they complete high school. Chief among them is whether to take a year off to pick up a paying job, go see the other places or proceed with their studies. Just as there are lots of advantages to working early, there are
also
 some demerits of
such
 activities as well. On the one hand, abound are many of the merits that come starting out sooner. For starters, getting a paid job at an early life affords one the opportunity of learning the basics learnings
such
 as financial intelligence and team building. Since these skills are not thought in schools, outside the classroom will avail you of
this
 knowledge at a very young age. If anyone could acquire
this
 understanding early, it makes mastery easier.
For example
, most of the most prudent managers didn't go beyond secondary education. They learnt and honed their skills in their younger life by listening to the masters. To add to that, seeing other places while you were younger gives one a good grasp of the culture and tradition of other people.
This
 will help you to network effectively when it is needed later in your chosen career.
Conversely
, opting to take a break in your learning could spell doom for anyone.
To begin
 with, you can become too comfortable with making money and as
such
 forget to go back to complete your formal academics.
For instance
, young boys who started earning money at an early age often find it difficult to go back to classrooms because they have assumed the position of the breadwinners in their families,
hence
 there is no need for them to
further
 the schooling anymore.
Also
, since most of these kids are not completely mature when they left high school, it is possible for them to be exploited and
this
 will derail their education. A case in hand is that of a factory manager that impregnated a teen who came to his facility to work. To sum it up, because of the reasons above,
although
 it is advantageous to pick up basic skills at an early age.
However
, it comes with its drawbacks as well.
Submitted by akoredeinpires on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • personal growth
  • maturity
  • independence
  • work experience
  • future employment
  • exploration of interests
  • informed decision
  • travel opportunities
  • broaden horizons
  • academic burnout
  • refresh and recharge
  • financial savings
  • academic momentum
  • study habits
  • academic discipline
  • wasted time
  • proper planning
  • transition difficulties
  • adjustment issues
  • social disconnect
  • peers
What to do next:
Look at other essays: