Write about the following topic: Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Poverty
is a global problem and every country should initiate an action to overcome it. Each country has a different approach towards the poor crowd and there are many ways to help the poor
people
to
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get rid of their
poverty
.
However
, by reducing the
iliteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
in the world, we can help the poor to earn the money. Nobody likes to be poor but some unfortunate
people
are born poor and they do not even
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think of getting out of that box. They follow their parents'
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footprint
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foot print
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.
For example
, if the parents are working as a cleaner, their children will follow the same occupation. In many countries, at
the
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very young age, kids start working as
a
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house maid
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or do labour work at the shops to meet their day to day needs. Since
,
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the employer needs to pay
the
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less
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wages to the kids, they opt for them only rather than hiring an adult.
Nonetheless
, it is high time to change
this
perception
towrds
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towards
poor
people
. With the help of the government and the NGOs, we can help diminish
the
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poverty
and encourage the less fortunate
people
to how to change their fortune. The main reason for
the
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poverty
is
an
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uneducated
people
.
This
crowd do not let their kids study in order to increase the family income by letting them do small jobs.
However
, they do not think about the future that they can earn more if they study and procure one degree. In
such
cases, the government should mandate the rules to avail the education and pass a rule
to
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not to hire anyone below the age of eighteen years.
The another
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way to help the poor
people
is to provide
them
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monthly financial aid for their basic needs as per their monthly income. In conclusion, with the help of the
governemnt
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government
and a couple of strict rules,
poverty
can
solved
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easily.
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