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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring?

#years #structure #roles #changes
Nowadays, family structures along with
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family roles are changing. Most
of
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the
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people
 prefer to live in a nuclear family because it gives an opportunity to the
people
 to be themselves.
Moreover
,
people
 get more privacy when they are alone or spending
time
 with their immediate family. In my opinion, these changes are positive.
Nuclear
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 family
structure
 includes immediate family members.
Firstly
, it gives
people
 to be more productive in
such
 a way that they will get enough
time
 to spend on themselves and be more productive rather than their other family members.
For instance
,
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one of
the
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 colleagues
live
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 in
a
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 extended family. She is always stressed and complaining about her migraines as there are always tensions in her family. I think if she would be living alone or in a nuclear family so she would not have
these kind
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 of difficult situations.
Secondly
,
people
 get more privacy in a nuclear family
structure
. They have plenty of
time
 to utilize it in their work efficiently.
For example
, I live in a nuclear family when I have
my
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 assignments I am able to complete
it
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 on
time
 rather than having issues.
On the contrary
, if I would be living in the same family
structure
 as
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 past
than
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 I think it would be difficult for me to concentrate on my other priorities.
Ina
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 nutshell, the family
structure
 and family roles
which
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 have changed over the past few years have
positive
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a positive
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 impact. The
people
 are getting more opportunities to be productive and to be themselves.
In addition
 to
this
,
people
 are getting more privacy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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