In their advertising business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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, advertising is one of the most essential factors in parts of daily people’s

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that many advertising of

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of new their

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advertising

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of new

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products

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in many ways. It is a selling strategy of

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business

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to convince many

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. The result of

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strategy can help them have more profits.

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makes a new style of dress which is the

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style of dress in the world. They use

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information to reveal many clients via online advertising to emphasize their

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which are new. After 2 months,

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the profit from buying

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dress about 12

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bath.

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is a positive development of marketing of

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because

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represents that

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creativity for selling their product by using the new thing to convince many

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to buy their

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. There are many ideas in the

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market so, clients have many choices of

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in selling.

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their idea to make a new menu of

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advertising of new their

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in many ways because it is a selling strategy of

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business

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and it is a positive development of marketing of

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to help

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

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In their advertising business nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Your opinion

Some people believe it is better to raise children in the city, while others consider the countryside to be a more suitable choice.

In many parts of the world, people search for family history. Some people think that finding for the previous generations is a thing to do, but others think that it is better to be focus on present and future generations. Discuss both views and show your opinion

**Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool.Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people whoplay them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?**

Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

When recruiting new staff, is it more important for a company to look at a candidate’s academic qualifications or his/her personality and ability to work with others? Support your opinion with appropriate reasons and examples.

Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool.Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people whoplay them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?