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Some people say it is important to keep your home and workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion?

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Many people believe that it is critical to
organized
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organize
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 the staff in
the
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a
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 specific place and retain your home and workplace tidy. I agree with
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 statement that being a tidy person leads to saving
time
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 and cleaning home and
workplace
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work
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 easier. If everything is organized and placed in designated locations, it becomes easier to clean surfaces because it is not necessary to relocate items in order to
clear
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clean
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 surfaces.
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, the only people I know who complain about cleaning are those that are disorganized, as they must spend extra
time
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 relocating items beforehand.
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 is because if everything is organized, we do not have to search for things, which consumes a lot of
time
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.
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 results in greater productivity in the workplace.
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, the most productive colleagues in the companies I have worked for have always had very organized desks and working spaces, which has helped them to save
time
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 because they have not had to
be bother
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 finding things. In conclusion, locating things in their own places leads to
clean
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cleaning
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 them in the fastest and easiest way and
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 compel to people save their
time
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 and feel relax.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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