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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Tell him which team won • Describe the weather conditions that day • Say how you felt about the match

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Dear Stephen, I’m writing to you regarding the game result that you
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 injured when the cricket ball struck
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your forehead. Our opponent won the contest by seven runs, and we could not return to the clash after you left the field towards the hospital.
However
, Lily grabbed 5 wickets, which was not sufficient to dominate the game though, I suppose. The weather condition was in our favour as it was overcast and windy, which assist our quick bowlers, especially Lily, to swing the ball;
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, we dropped five catches
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 the field.
Therefore
, our team lost the match, which hurt due to the close contest. I’m still recovering from the loss as we could not win the tournament after
such
 hard work.
Moreover
, for the
next
 season, we must search for our sponsor for
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season to recover our regular expenses and experienced fielding coach as our team is well-known to the opponent for poor fielding. All the best! Ryan Smith
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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