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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
illustrate
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given
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gives
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 the wave-energy
machine
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machine's
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 possible allocation, specification and the
menthod
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method
 of energy generation.
Overall
,
AIR
 circulation in chambers is the
machanisum
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mechanism
 to
produces
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the
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apply
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electricity
.
Machine
 location is the driver of the
electricity
output
, and it's one of the
factor
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factors
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 of the
set up
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set-up
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 cost as well. Wave go into chambers along the path on
bottom
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the bottom
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 and
air flow
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airflow
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come
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coming
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 from the top side of
machince
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machine
machines
 to
casue
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cause
 the water levels rise and
air flow
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airflow
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 upward,
then
air
were
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was
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cuirculating
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circulating
 in chambers to move the turbine spin, as it's connected
electricity
 generator,
therefore
 the turbine movement could generate the
electricity
. Waves
output
 depends on
machine
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the machine
a machine
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in
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is
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placed
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place
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. Small waves when machiner near to
land
then
output
 lower, when it's in
placed
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place
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 far away from
land
,
output
 higher
due to
 the wares is lager. Installation cost is higher when it's not
clsoe
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close
 to
land
,
oppositly
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oppositely
opposite
 cheaper installation cost when
machine
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the machine
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 nearly to
land
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, air, electricity, output, land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 3 times.
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