Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays,
enviromental
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environmental
issues become more and more alerted to global mankind. In
this
concept, who is responsible for
environment
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the environment
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is always in controversial arguments around the
word
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world
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. Numerous people argue that governments have to
responsible
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for local and international
ecosystem
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ecosystems
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,
meanwhile
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others claim that the
citizens
are the major portion of
this
whole problem. My essay will discuss both of these viewpoints, followed by my own
idea
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ideas
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. On the
one
hand, because every person contributes to pollution
in
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variable
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scale,
citizens
should have their own parts in environmental protection.
In other words
, if each individual
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is awares
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awares
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aware
awareness
of their activities to reduce personal
wastes
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waste
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and
litters
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litter
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, the whole country will not suffer from harsh pollution,
people
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and people
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hence
could enjoy
clean
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a clean
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, fresh atmosphere.
For example
, there was
one
research illustrated that Vietnam was
one
of
top
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3 among
South east
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Southeast
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asia
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Asia
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in run-off quantity,
however
, the isolation policy
in covid-19
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during the COVID-19
pandemic which
elongated
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for 4 months led to
one
indirect result that the total waste of Vietnam significantly downgraded
due to
less plastic consumption.
Hence
,
by
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one
hand,
every body
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everybody
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could reduce run-off waste on the Earth.
On the other hand
, some viewpoints indicate that the vast majority of run-off in the whole world is from large-scale manufacture which is mainly controlled by governmental
issue
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issues
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. Since manufacturing activities require significant energy consumption from fossil fuels and their poisonous waste may be dramatically over the recycling ability, the local environment would suffer from
unexpecting
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disaster
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disasters
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from those poisons.
For instance
, in order to maintain manufacturing steel
produce
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products
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,
one
company in central
vietnam
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Vietnam
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threw tons of red poisonous mud straight
to
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the sea, local
citizens
evidenced thousands of
died
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fish on the sea surface for months later;
local
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government
then
refused "permission requirement" from
this
manufacture to
countinuely
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continually
continue
work in
this
province;
however
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it must be decades to recover the sea area.
As a consequence
, officers should
supervisor
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carefully local manufacturing to accommodate their policies depending on spectacular
circumstance
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circumstances
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. In conclusion, each viewpoint shows plausible details
in
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apply
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concerning environmental
issue
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issues
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. In my perspective,
although
today
citizens
have
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a senses
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senses
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sense
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of surrounding protection, global governments should publish appropriate policies to prevent the Earth from
overpolluted
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being overpolluted
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.
Thus
, I am looking forward to seeing the shake hands of Presidents in
next
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the next
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Kyoto meeting.
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