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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are?· What solutions can you suggest?

#city #traffic #congestion
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In almost every country, a
problem
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 that has been existed, especially in a big
city
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, is
traffic
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 congestion. These situations happened due to some reason. It can be caused by both
people
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 and
city
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 plans. To start with, In an enormous
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,
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 as Bangkok, had
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problem
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 because
people
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 afraid that they will go to
work
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 late, and most companies start
work
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 at 8 o'clock, so they decide to set off early, and
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 the
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 occurs because they are going out on the road at the same time, so the
traffic
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 is bad. Another reason is the
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 plan, if at
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 the town was designed by unprofessional, it will affect
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 in the
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 in the future years.
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, the primary cause is urbanization, because many
people
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 from all over the countries, come to the big
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 for
work
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, experience and so on. When there are more
people
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 and cars but the same number of roads,
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 congestion will happen obviously. The method that can solve
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problem
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 may come from the government, it should provide more public transportations to citizens in the countries or cities
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 It will have less car in the road if most of the
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 take public cars
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. Another method is the company should provide
work
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 from home for some
people
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, because some workers do not have to be present at the company, they can just
work
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 their assignment at their residences.
Traffic
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 jams can occur because of commuters and the town plans.
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 issue can be resolved by both government and company by creating more public transport and permitting employees to
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 at their accommodations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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