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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicle will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many
people
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 think cheaper
air
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travel
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 should be encouraged because it gives ordinary
people
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 to
travel
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, others think
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 leads to environmental problems, so
air
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travel
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 should be more expansive in order to discourage
people
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 to have it. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Most
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people
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 have a common understanding that budget price flights should be promoted for the sake of
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 earners. Few others opinion is that
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expensive
airplane
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 services should be introduced to reduce travelling based on the harmful impact to the biodiversity. The prime reason for inexpensive
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 needs to be motivated is because of the social changes it has made to
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civilization. Humans understand each other better when travelling and meeting physically. We now have
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 of cultures more than ever in
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history due to frequent and affordable travelling methods.
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airfreights
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many
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equipment
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are
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lives in critical illness.
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 many patients
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 across the seas to treat them .
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 cost of travelling
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 surge in
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 has rooted
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adverse
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 in
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nature.
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 flight schedule is a pivotal reason
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 global warming due to carbon emission because of
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fossil fuel usage.
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 of vegetation will be wiped out to build concrete platforms for landing space in order to
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give
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 view for the pilot.
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animals
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 in the area will be disrupted and may extinct in near future.
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 essential to reduce overwhelming
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. In conclusion ,
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air
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 have undoubtedly changed the life of average income earners.
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affect
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in
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 the environment is undermined because of
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 profitable business.
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 level of financial and
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 controls needs to be imposed to mitigate
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 consequences.
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