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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today's world, it has become quite an extensive competition among individuals and they are driving their path towards future endeavours with greater enthusiasm. But
this
 passion is sometimes short-lived due to family as well as societal pressure. In
this
 essay, I am going to depict the common man's diverse thinking regarding student's study. There are folks who allow their children to pursue education as per their likes and understanding. They provide them with the utmost freedom and independence to choose their stream of studies.
This
 helps them build mental and inner peace as well as the relation between them and their parents improve manifold.
Furthermore
, helping them choose their study would bring happiness and less depression.
For instance
, a guy died of suicide because his family pressurized him to pursue a field which he wasn't capable of, and the constant pressure on his brain, made him take
such
 an extreme step. Ergo, making them choose their dreams, helps them achieve passionately. People tend to opine that students should be allowed to pursue subjects like science and technology, which would be beneficial for future prospects. They would be able to earn more and make a living out of it, but they are under the wrong impression that
this
 would make them happy or content. All in all, they should be allowed to undertake
such
 a subject that they are capable of and it should depend upon their calibre as well.
For example
, if a student is forced to study science and is unable to complete it because he doesn't understand the subject would do no good to him. Rather, he should be allowed to pursue what he actually desires and aim for. In my opinion, children should be allowed to pursue their dreams as every student is different and
also
 their brain functioning. It should be a personal choice that would make them achieve their dreams with great passion and there would be fewer cases of suicide in our country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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