The money spent by governments on space programs would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, due to
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advancement
space
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exploration
program
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have increased in
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nation countries and
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spend vast sums of money on
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space
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a space
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project
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projects
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. In my opinion,
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is a waste of money, and the budget should be allocated for public
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. There are several reasons for reducing
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programs expenditure.
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, it is extremely expensive to train scientists and provide equipment, and building a
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station
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comes at a huge cost to the government.
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, if one of the
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exploration projects fails, a large amount of
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money and time will be wasted and some scientists may even lose their lives. An objective example is the
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Shuttle Challenger broke apart 73 seconds into its flight and all seven astronauts were killed in the crash.
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, If the
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programs
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successfully, do not benefit normal people in
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lives; it just shows the power of
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politician
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politicians
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.
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, if governments allocate
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budget
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social community
services
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, people benefit more often. These facilities are cheaper than
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exploration,
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, the cost of building a school cannot be compared to a
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station. People need hospital and school
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their daily lives,
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these impact on
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in society. If
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amount of spending is allocated to social
services
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, the quality of life will be improved, so poverty will be decreased and social welfare will be increased. In conclusion, the expenditure that authorities have spent on
space
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programs should be used for developing public
services
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to improve human life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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