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Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#education #component #school #program
Nowadays, it is argued that
finance
 is one of the most important issues,
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the school
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school
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 should allocate time in the curriculum for
this
 topic to educate
students
how
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 to deal
,
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 when encountering
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the real world. I believe that educational institutions have to teach their
students
 financial
education
.
Firstly
, educating
students
 about financial issues is very important because of many practical benefits, learning about
finance
 prepares
students
 for
the
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future life.
Also
, financial studies
in
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school
 programs will improve the
students
' academic educational results and it leads
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student
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 to be prepared either in the job market or personal life. If financial
education
 would be mandatory,
students
 will follow it seriously, so they will choose
finance
 as an academic field with a better prospect.
secondly
, in today’s economic crisis that involve nearly all countries, those which put financial
education
 in
school
 curriculum would deal with the financial disasters more easily. Nowadays, many adults have some monetary problems and
lacking
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 the capability of financial analysis. Quite often, the reason can be the lack of foundations or insecurity about financial terms and concepts. Starting to learn financial issues from
the
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 early
ages
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, create a strong background that
prevent
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such
 situations. In conclusion,
finance
 as an everyday activity which is a crucial subject in the future
,
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 requires
school
education
. I agree that financial
education
 should be an obligatory
parts
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 of the
school
 schedule.
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