Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, communities have different views about whether melodies play a crucial role in bringing crowds of a variety of civilizations and
ages
altogether. I think
although
singing is an important action for bringing crowd who accustomed to another culture and who have different
ages
from others together, it is still is not a necessity. On the one hand, it cannot be denied that melody plays an important role in every society,
therefore
, authorities take place some international soul tournaments like Eurovision and it is undeniable that many countries musicians can attend these events. More ,importantly the public who have different
ages
and civilizations can be met in the same place in
this
action.
For example
, if
this
type of melody competition is stopped and removed completely , the community who are attending
this
type of rock competition cannot take a chance for gathering other
people
who have different
ages
and fashions.
Consequently
,
,
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melodies are the best action for meeting and gathering different
people
who are living in other countries and accustomed to other cultures.
On the other hand
, it is no secret
people
have different
music
tastes in order that some young generations are reluctant to listen to old generation melodies.
This
means that some
people
who have different
music
tastes cannot meet and gather in the same place for the same purposes
such
as international
music
competitions.
For instance
, if one tries to gather
people
for
this
purpose
, probably
this
person can face some problems because of different pleasures
such
as some disrespectful situations,
this
means, some youngsters can be done some disrespectful things to other
people
who are aged and accustomed to different countries.
As a result
,
music
is not the best way for
this
purpose
always,
thus
, other great ways can be thought by the government and
people
for
this
purpose
. In conclusion, I think even though
music
plays an essential role in today's world and can be useful for meeting
people
in different cultures and
ages
, is still unimportant and other ways can be found for
this
purpose
.
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  • cultural exchange
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